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题目：Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development that any experiences we may have in our life.
Which do you consider to be the major influence?
Wether the personalities of human beings are relevant to the born characteristics or succeeding life experience, though, is salient.
An ample amount of researches in education present cases of this kind, scientists classify the born characteristics into four categories, which reveals the personalities subtly affected by those irretrievable factors— genomes. Different substances in people’s blood can beget different actions, such as various babies’ frequency of crying is diversified due to the born characteristics. However, it is ubiquitously accepted that the life experience plays a major role in fostering personalities. To ameliorate people in life styles, language skills, dress styles and etc, is the primary function of surroundings.What’s more, experience nowadays seems to have gone from being a vehicle for pursuing an abundant material life to a innate growth. A host of activities illustrate people’s yearnings for establishing a more perfect personalities, like reading, meditation, and yoga. In those cases, we can figure out that personalities are hugely influenced by human activities, that’s what we call experience. Last but not the least, the positive effects of experience on personalities outweigh the negative parts, which must be addressed accordingly. If one’s life are inundated with failure experience devoid of patient instructions, the extreme pessimistic personalities are doomed to influence the person. Vise versa, the positive life experience can nourish an extraordinary person.
To sum up, person’ life experience seemed more coincide with the evolution of personalities, while there is no denying that born characteristics are able to incite tiny changes in one’s personalities, which can be altered by experience as well.
题目：Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development that any experiences we may have in our life.
Which do you consider to be the major influence?
Wether the personalities of human beings are relevant to the born characteristics or succeeding life experience, though, is salient.
An ample amount of researches in education present cases of this kind, scientists classify the born characteristics into four categories, which reveals the personalities subtly affected by those irretrievable factors— genomes. Different substances in people’s blood can beget different actions, such as various babies’ frequency of crying is diversified due to the born characteristics. However, it is ubiquitously accepted that the life experience plays a major role in fostering personalities. To ameliorate people in life styles, language skills, dress styles and etc, is the primary function of surroundings.What’s more, experience nowadays seems to have gone from being a vehicle for pursuing an abundant material life to a innate growth. A host of activities illustrate people’s yearnings for establishing a more perfect personalities, like reading, meditation, and yoga. In those cases, we can figure out that personalities are hugely influenced by human activities, that’s what we call experience. Last but not the least, the positive effects of experience on personalities outweigh the negative parts, which must be addressed accordingly. If one’s life are inundated with failure experience devoid of patient instructions, the extreme pessimistic personalities are doomed to influence the person. Vise versa, the positive life experience can nourish an extraordinary person.
To sum up, person’ life experience seemed more coincide with the evolution of personalities, while there is no denying that born characteristics are able to incite tiny changes in one’s personalities, which can be altered by experience as well.
